College Essay Samples
See the growth from the first draft to the final.
Prompt: "Tell us about a long-term goal you achieved."
First Draft: "In high school, I just focused on doing well academically."
Final Draft: "My primary goal throughout high school was to maintain straight A's. Achieving this goal in Honors classes taught me that I could succeed with hard work and dedication, which will help me maintain academic excellence at [university]..."
Prompt: "What have you discovered since you started your college search?"
First Draft: "Your university is not just a small white Catholic school, you actually have diversity."
Final Draft: "[Your university's] Office of Diversity offers vast opportunities that I never imagined a small, tight-knit school could provide. I especially hope to join organizations like FreeZone and the International Student Organization..."
Prompt: "How will opportunities at [our university] support your interests?"
First Draft: "I'm really interested in Engineering and you have a top-ranked program."
Final Draft: "After years in a STEM program with only two other girls, I'm excited to join your 'Women in Engineering Program' and earn a B.S. in Chemical Engineering - without feeling so alone. Also, you truly value freshmen, facilitating paid Co-Ops with companies like General Motors..."